tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4782711640315733709.post1730754102104936866..comments2016-10-19T16:44:55.470-07:00Comments on Brotique: 67%Will Stronghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13253387218024392823noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4782711640315733709.post-35034328922813197712009-12-13T22:11:57.986-08:002009-12-13T22:11:57.986-08:00Amen. I like the 2/3rds theme and the recurring m...Amen. I like the 2/3rds theme and the recurring mathematics. I like the quirky characters and exchange of merchandise. The verse is fun--I agree with Jed--tighten up the rhyme and meter and it'll flow.J. Kirk Richardshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08760894315976620240noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4782711640315733709.post-23889606572818072532009-12-03T18:24:44.850-08:002009-12-03T18:24:44.850-08:00Fun. Like a drunk Shel Silverstein.Fun. Like a drunk Shel Silverstein.JAKE WYATThttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07476712770029415652noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4782711640315733709.post-61091135671957096412009-11-30T09:41:15.106-08:002009-11-30T09:41:15.106-08:00I love the last couplet. I'd probably bloody ...I love the last couplet. I'd probably bloody his nose too. <br /><br />But then again, so much free stuff. Score.Will Stronghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13253387218024392823noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4782711640315733709.post-17372103174865683392009-11-27T07:46:14.034-08:002009-11-27T07:46:14.034-08:00I have cousins in Kalamazoo, MI. Yes, it's a r...I have cousins in Kalamazoo, MI. Yes, it's a real place.<br /><br />Adam, I really enjoy the sing-song nonsense you played with here. As far as I can tell, this is the verbal version of one of my ridiculous sketches. :)<br /><br />Your first stanza is the strongest - it adheres to the rhythm, and sets the pattern of counting and randomness. Fun!<br /><br />JedJed Henryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04792057010893279956noreply@blogger.com